Tuesday, April 27, 2010

Long sentence update

If you've been following the long-sentence thread, here and here, I'm happy to say that I have now written a long sentence that got approved, and it goes like this:
So this matters, what we're doing today, this gathering of people, this new office space, these new jobs, those patients out there who need the particular medicine we're bringing them today and the additional medicines we will bring them in the near future and in years to come, this North and South American region we are building, from Canada now, down through the United States, on across Mexico, and into Brazil--all of this matters.
These words appear in a speech, so they don't show up in the script as one sentence. But everything here is an expansion of the subject "this" and the predicate "matters." They are 80 words that belong together, entering the listener's ear on the simple assertion that "this matters," and then going on to paint a richer picture of what "this" actually is: it's this gathering, this space, these jobs, those patients, this region; and when all is said and done, the listener should have a pretty good sense of how it matters.

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